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Postby firsty on Sat Aug 05, 2006 1:31 am

I drive past this every morning on the way to work and have been meaning to stop and get this shot for a long time, so I got up early on my day off to take this shot... hope you like it

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Postby Yi-P on Sat Aug 05, 2006 2:08 am

Simply amazing!!, were it tripod mounted? Which station is that one?
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Postby Rick on Sat Aug 05, 2006 7:54 am

This one I like, the light on the platform, people and moving train, great composition and timing.

I think a little more at the top (more sky) might make it look a little less crowded, just a lttle, maybe.

Great shot.

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Postby Glen on Sat Aug 05, 2006 8:00 am

Keith, you have captured the early morning well
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Postby Oscar on Sat Aug 05, 2006 8:11 am

Great shot Keith. Very keen on your day off. Nice timing/composition with the shot.
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Postby firsty on Sat Aug 05, 2006 8:15 am

Yi-P wrote:were it tripod mounted? Which station is that one?

yes it was on a tripod and the shot was taken at Sydenham station (on the full size file you can read the station name clearly)

Rick wrote:I think a little more at the top (more sky) might make it look a little less crowded, just a little, maybe.

there is more sky in the original and it is a lot brighter, some much so that it dominated the shot and as I wanted the station to be the focus and the destination to be only hinted at I have burnt the crap out of the sky just leaving the hint of light behind center point tower and I also dodged the railway lines back into the photo to help lead your eyes through the shot
this is only a quick rough edit to see what I could get out of the shot and there are lots more ways to edit this
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Postby CraigVTR on Sat Aug 05, 2006 9:37 am

Wow. That shots makes City Rail look much more romantic than what I remember.

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Postby johnd on Sat Aug 05, 2006 10:05 am

That's an awesome shot Keith. The PPing certainly adds to the image and as you say just gives a hint of the destination.
Really nice.
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Postby the foto fanatic on Sat Aug 05, 2006 10:17 am

Lovely image. :D
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Postby sirhc55 on Sat Aug 05, 2006 11:45 am

Well worth the stop Keith :)
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Postby RogerC on Sat Aug 05, 2006 1:04 pm

Nice shot I like this a lot, lovely combination of elements and well taken.
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Postby HappyFotographer on Sat Aug 05, 2006 2:28 pm

Well done Keith, a very nice image.
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Postby MHD on Sat Aug 05, 2006 2:38 pm

Very nice shot...
Good composition with the rail track leading to the eerily lit sydney skyline..
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Postby Finch on Sat Aug 05, 2006 2:58 pm

Keith,

This shot is just brilliant. Can't fault it in any way.

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Postby fozzie on Sat Aug 05, 2006 3:18 pm

Keith - well worth the early get out of bed on your day off. Simply beautiful colours and also composition.
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Postby gstark on Sat Aug 05, 2006 3:24 pm

Keith,

Delightful
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Postby Geoff on Sat Aug 05, 2006 5:10 pm

Keith - very bloody nice :)
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Postby Matt. K on Sat Aug 05, 2006 5:12 pm

Keith
You have captured the light but you missed your train! :D :D :D
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Postby mark on Sat Aug 05, 2006 5:43 pm

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Great photo. Great pp'ing. Glad you got up early on your day off.
I think City Rail could use an image like this for their marketing. It sure makes train travel more appealing to me. Now if only we had a train here in Byron. Train Station, no train :wink: Nice one :)
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Postby Lukaszek on Sat Aug 05, 2006 8:05 pm

Great capture! The city line adds cheaps to the photo!

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Postby Rainey on Mon Aug 07, 2006 2:48 pm

One of the best shots I've seen here. I love the train, captured at exactly the right moment!
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Postby JordanP on Mon Aug 07, 2006 3:14 pm

Great shot Keith.

I really enjoy the composition and your eye for detail in this finished image. The cityscape adds to the image while in no way distracts. Motion is well placed with very sharp lines on all stationary ojects - this is a strong emphasis. Timing must have been an important factor.

Dam, I wish I could even think of a shot like this.

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Postby ABG on Tue Aug 08, 2006 10:43 am

Wonderful Keith :)
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Postby huynhie on Tue Aug 08, 2006 10:47 am

great photo Keith. :wink:
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Re: before the rain on the train today

Postby ozimax on Tue Aug 08, 2006 5:13 pm

firsty wrote:I drive past this every morning on the way to work and have been meaning to stop and get this shot for a long time, so I got up early on my day off to take this shot... hope you like it


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