First shot looks like a great start. From shadows, looks like you had a nice overcast day, so the lighting conditions would have given you more keepers.
The first shot you have posted, I would have asked the
model to swap arm positions ("change arms"), as she is shading her face from the soft light source (evident under the camera left side of sorong).
Also, I like to see some shots cropped in, at say above the knee. By keeping full length legs in, particularly at this focal length, her legs look extra long (and sometimes feet, if in focus, are not the softest, most beautiful feature to portray in these images). If you dont have any out of the camera that way, perhaps crop in PP. I cant see the focal length, but guessing around 18mm since her feet are nearly as long, as her shoulders are wide (and I'm sure thats not the case in real life). For head to toe, I like to use 70-100 range, but you are often too far away to be heard from subject. Someone in here, I think it was one of the Glen's, said to me, to keep focal lenght longer than standard for portraiture, for more flattering perspectives. Take the 85mm for example, a treat and delight!
Note to others: please note, that
models read this forum, and even though comments are no doubt made in jest, they can be read the wrong way, as text has no pronunciation. I know
models that I work with, perfer thanks, over cheekiness. Anyway, dont want to start anything to get off topic, just think its worth a mention, thats all...
Back on topic:
Last observation, is camera angle. If you are lower, than the centre of your subject, for this pose, her feet are going to be bigger than her head. And one of the first things to see in the pic, can be, hips wider than shoulders, which is not flattering for most. Granted, this location may not have provided you with a place to gain height from, but just thought I'd share my learnings. Location, step ladder? Or pose
model lower on rockwall, and compose to crop out "ground level things"?
I think exposure is good, do you have any EXIF on your files?
thanks for sharing!
Oz