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thanks all for your solid feedback in this thread on my last image.

http://www.dslrusers.com/viewtopic.php?p=303136#303136

I have incorporated most of the comments, and appreciate feedback on this one, which has included all the PP comments / suggestions from the first thread.

Some positve, and negative feedback most valuable, thanks in advance.

I like that. I think it works pretty well personally.

I would have liked to see a different expression on her face though I think this one looks a little bored.

Great work!

much better
i think ur slowly ironing out ur problems with these pics...
now ur on the right track
excellent

Colours look much better. Agree that the model does look a little uninterested.

Don't really like the positioning of the model against the grain of the flooring though. Unforunatly can't get over the grey hair. Far too distracting and not flattering at all.

Colour is looking a lot better there, though I agree that it's looking boxed.

Open up your compositional framing a bit more and leave some room on the sides and stop for her hair, plus a fraction more where her lower hand is.

Make her look relaxed but not enclosed.

Nnnnsic wrote:Colour is looking a lot better there, though I agree that it's looking boxed.

Open up your compositional framing a bit more and leave some room on the sides and stop for her hair, plus a fraction more where her lower hand is.

Make her look relaxed but not enclosed.

this one was much wider frame, this is a crop. I took the advise to shoot wider and crop in PP (to avoid amputation look). I'll take another look tonight.

I like everything about this shot, except i think its too tightly cropped...

i'd like to see more space around her hair and arms, and more of her in general (obviously),

but i can see why its cropped where it is.... but the lighting and everything else looks good!

brett, about the bored face.... i could probably make a very bad tasted joke, but i'll refrain!

MattyO wrote:I like everything about this shot, except i think its too tightly cropped...

i'd like to see more space around her hair and arms, and more of her in general (obviously),

but i can see why its cropped where it is.... but the lighting and everything else looks good!

brett, about the bored face.... i could probably make a very bad tasted joke, but i'll refrain!

thanks for your feedback, and for respecting the model not to elaborate on any jokes.

the joke was nothing to do with the model at all... was just a friendly crack at brett, but i told him already

could you post up a more loosely cropped shot?

MattyO wrote:could you post up a more loosely cropped shot?

will do tonight.

I really can't find anything negative about this image. It's warm, appealing and the model is perfectly placed. Simplicity is hard to get and pays off. Nice work!

A beautiful model beautifully lit. Skin tones are terrific Oz. Well done.
cheers
marco

this is a quick edit of the uncropped file.

I think I prefer the tighter crop, its simpler. But here for your comparison regarding composition.