Head Shot Help

I offered my services to my dad who is on the board for the golf club we play at. they have a wall with head shots of the members of the board along with their names, and position on the board. the current shots look like they were taken with a P&S, printed on a 10 yr bubble jet!!!
I did some very, very quick sample shots for the golf club manager to look at and they didn't turn out as i would have hoped.
these were taken with 50mm, Sb800 pointed straight up with LSJP.II attached (no inverted dome) WB set to Flash (I think). no PP done at all!
Next time I will have a tripod & will be able to frame the shots a bit better, basically they want to at least see the embroidery on the blazer pocket.
The main thing I am worried about is the shadow to the right of his head and under his nose.
I only have the equipment in my sig available.
Any help would be greatly appreciated
Cheers
Laurie
I did some very, very quick sample shots for the golf club manager to look at and they didn't turn out as i would have hoped.
these were taken with 50mm, Sb800 pointed straight up with LSJP.II attached (no inverted dome) WB set to Flash (I think). no PP done at all!


Next time I will have a tripod & will be able to frame the shots a bit better, basically they want to at least see the embroidery on the blazer pocket.
The main thing I am worried about is the shadow to the right of his head and under his nose.
I only have the equipment in my sig available.
Any help would be greatly appreciated
Cheers
Laurie