My First Model Shoot!

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My First Model Shoot!

Postby bonou2 on Fri Aug 18, 2006 12:17 am

Hey all,

I am not sure how i went, i amde plenty of mistakes but with practice comes perfect! Any advice or critique offered would be taken on board!

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Postby byrt_001 on Fri Aug 18, 2006 12:28 am

hi

very deviantart material, i really like the last one.

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Postby Technik on Fri Aug 18, 2006 12:52 am

well done! great shots...very creative esp the last two photos.

my fav one would be #3 :D
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Postby marcotrov on Fri Aug 18, 2006 10:58 am

Well done Dan, very dramatic B&W images. Sombre and stylish :) Love the lighting in the harbour bridge shot. Details on the shot? :)
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Postby Glen on Fri Aug 18, 2006 11:05 am

Dan very dramatic, like them all. I would suggest that on 5 you move a lityle further from the wall to reduce the shadow on the wall. :wink:




ps We have a 4 images per post rule in the FAQ, could you keep that in mind next post? Thanks
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Postby bonou2 on Fri Aug 18, 2006 11:26 am

Ohh....sorry didnt know about the 4photos rule. Wont happen again :)

Thanks for the feedback!

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They are good

Postby zafra52 on Fri Aug 18, 2006 11:27 am

The first one has too much light for my liking (I am being very subjective) and I prefer the black and white photos. Specially the one with the hands interlocked it is more than sadness... more like dispair, or loss. They are very moody. :cry:
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Postby wendellt on Fri Aug 18, 2006 12:32 pm

i like the 1st one because you exposed for the backlit model therefore blowing out the background a trick often used by many photographers
it looks very nostalgic but i think the expression counters the effect
and thats probably why it's not liked so much, this would of worked better if the expression was gentler

sombre expressions are good it's a challenging series really gets you thinking compared to the the obvious glamour shot

in terms of strling love the 2nd one and fill flash harbour shot
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Postby Matt. K on Fri Aug 18, 2006 6:44 pm

Your techniques are sound and your creativity comes through. Your model has too much eye makeup and it detracts from the rest of her face.
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Postby asaroha on Fri Aug 18, 2006 6:59 pm

Nice series, the harbour shot is my favourite. The rest are excellent too but it is just a bit too sombre for me.
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Postby PiroStitch on Fri Aug 18, 2006 7:05 pm

I like the 2nd pic a lot. If you can, burn the edges and the left a bit to create a bit more contrast and make the overall mood a bit darker.

Keep up the good work.
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