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More coffee table fun

Postby Alex on Sat Feb 03, 2007 10:31 pm

Similar set-up to my previous coffee table shot. Would love some critique/ suggestions.

This was less of a silhouette, with more light spilling on the model's face and her front.

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Same for this one, the ligh power was adjusted higher to provide more of a spill on face and front of the model. Processing included adding some noise/grain - not sure if it worked here.

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This one again, a bit more light to show facial features.

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Postby Heath Bennett on Sat Feb 03, 2007 11:08 pm

Number three is the winner for me here - love the backlighting.
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Postby owen on Sat Feb 03, 2007 11:11 pm

Hi Alex.

In my honest opinion, the first two shots aren't very flattering pose-wise, though the lighting looks good to me.

The last shot is a cracker though, perhaps the only criticism is that it looks like she's looking out the corner of her eye at me.
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Postby Matt. K on Sun Feb 04, 2007 12:00 am

Hi Alex
Some interesting shots there...I love your lighting! The first shot is in her face. Imagine a tight crop to just below the chin....that's a powerful image! Can you shoot that again?
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Postby PiroStitch on Sun Feb 04, 2007 12:05 am

Very nice to see a style developing here Alex :) The third one is the best out of the lot
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Postby Alpha_7 on Sun Feb 04, 2007 12:20 am

Third one works the best, I'm still really impressed by how simple yet affective your lighting setup is, keep posting :)
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Postby beetleboy on Sun Feb 04, 2007 12:40 am

I like the 3rd but would like to see the glass a bit darker - maybe do a second RAW conversion and drop the EV until the glass shows up then paint it into your original image with a layer mask.
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Postby Pa on Sun Feb 04, 2007 5:47 am

i like the third image alex well done. the first two have to much noise for me, but apart from that they are good images.
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Postby colin_12 on Sun Feb 04, 2007 7:50 am

These are good Alex. I like three as well.
Would you considder using a darker liquid in the glass so you dont see the distortion of her fingers through it?
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Postby Alex on Sun Feb 04, 2007 6:08 pm

Thanks a lot for the comments and suggestions everyone.

Matt: I see what you mean about cropping the image just to include her head I think it will work great, I hate her distorted foot in that shot anyway. I will try to reshoot within the next couple of weekends.

Liam: I agree about the glass. I will try to use a mask to bring the EV down a tad and make it more visible.

Colin: Great suggestion. The problem is that the model concerned has a taste for a very expensive French champaign only :lol:

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Postby gstark on Sun Feb 04, 2007 6:23 pm

Alex,

To help in these shots, I do think we have an issue with the clothing. The top has a very busy pattern, and I don;t think that this helps matters. Does your model have a leotard or maybe a body stocking?

While I understand the sensitivities here, perhaps some nice lingerie - a teddy perhaps, or maybe nude or near nude? Play with lighting and the pose to deal address modesty issues that might arise.

I think that the primary subject needs to have the complexity reduced, as noted above, and as well, I don't think that the tiles on the coffee table help much either. Cover the tabletop with a black cloth or maybe just a large sheet of foam core board.

While Colin suggests a darker beverage in the glass, but I would certainly do nothing to discourage the current beverage of choice. Instead, just change the way the glass is being held.

As it is, the way she is currently holding it will lead to accidental warming of the Veuve, and that is simply not good enough. Were she to hold the glass by the stem, both problems go away. :)
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Postby Alex on Sun Feb 04, 2007 6:50 pm

Hi Gary,

Thanks for the suggestions. Yes, I agree completely about the choice of clothes - it has to come off completely or at least reduce. I'm working on that :twisted:

Very good suggestion about the way the glass is held - LOL will keep the beverage :lol:

Agree also about the texture of the coffee table top.

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Postby gstark on Sun Feb 04, 2007 7:05 pm

Alex wrote:I agree completely about the choice of clothes - it has to come off completely or at least reduce. I'm working on that :twisted:


And that's where this becomes a very valuable exercise for you.

The nudity can be there, and it can be evident, but good technique and posing can do wonders to preserve a model's dignity.
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Postby wendellt on Mon Feb 05, 2007 5:41 pm

hi alex

havn't forgotten about this thread

the first one is very good because your experimenting more with shape
even though the garment is a bit messy it still works theres clear angles and lines in the pose, theres alot to learn about pose and how it interacts with the fahion and overal perception of the image

table looks cool too

nice distributed backlighting too with the bedsheet
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Postby Alex on Mon Feb 05, 2007 9:17 pm

Thanks a lot for the comments, Wendell!

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