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Coffee Shop Girl

Postby Bob G on Fri Dec 22, 2006 11:54 pm

Favourite Coffee Shop Girl

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Postby Glen on Sat Dec 23, 2006 12:00 am

Bob, composition is excellent but the PP treatment, for me, leaves me with two points of interest which is confusing. I personally would just colourise the girl
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Postby mattyjacobs on Sat Dec 23, 2006 12:14 am

so many things in this image make me cringe, but none of them have anything to do with the actual photo ... that is to say, I like the photo ... just not that coffee.

Reschsmooth understands me.[/i]
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Postby Glen on Sat Dec 23, 2006 12:17 am

Matty, after tasting your and Reshsmooth's coffee, plus seeing the standard of preparation, I doubt I could ever go out to a cafe with either of you. It would always be full of disappointment.
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Postby Alex on Sat Dec 23, 2006 8:42 am

This is a great photo. I like it a lot. The only critique is that the duotone is not my favourite. I think I'd just prefer straight b&w here, but that's my personal view.

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Postby Bob G on Sat Dec 23, 2006 8:54 am

I understand where you coffee afficianados are coming from and I agree with you.

As a guy with a ECM Giotto, Mini Mazzer and only using particular freshly roasted beans between days 3 and 10 I too make sacrifices to attend the local coffee shops. :roll: :roll: :roll:

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Postby gstark on Sat Dec 23, 2006 9:20 am

Bob,

How did you do the conversion to b&w? There seems to me to be a colour cast in this image, rather than a neutral b&w.

I'm also finding the burned out cups at the top of the machine quite distracting, and I'm wondering if a different crop might not suit this image better?
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Postby Mj on Sat Dec 23, 2006 9:57 am

Looks to me like a desaturation duotone rather than a b&w conversion.
I would probably suggest going back and doing the PP again, change your b&w treatment and keep the girl in colour. Not sure what you can do different in way of crops but perhaps you can manage to tone down the burnout of the cups.
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Postby gstark on Sat Dec 23, 2006 11:10 am

Mj wrote:Not sure what you can do different in way of crops


Square, or perhaps portrait, cropping out a large part of the coffee machine?
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Postby Bob G on Sat Dec 23, 2006 12:22 pm

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Duplicate Layer
Image>Adjustments>Hue/Sauration>Tick Colorize Box
Paint out Coffee Machine with History Brush

Not really a B&W conversion or a Duotone
Just messin really
I would be interested in how others do those B& W conversion with the red item in the pic which were on here a couple of months ago

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Postby gstark on Sat Dec 23, 2006 1:29 pm

Bob,

Matt K posted - quite some time ago - a really good and simple precedure for converting to b&w. I just tried a quick look, but I couldn't find it. Hopefully somebody will have the thread ookmarked and they can post a a reference to it in this thread.
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Postby Geoff on Sat Dec 23, 2006 1:39 pm

I use Matt K's way of converting to B&W exclusively now.
Go to image>mode>lab mode.

Then, split channels , discard B and A channel, leaving you L - then play around with the levels/contrast etc.

I think this is one of the best ways to convert nicely to B&W.
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Postby Oz_Beachside on Sat Dec 23, 2006 1:53 pm

thanks for the B&W tips, very fast, thanks!!!
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Postby Reschsmooth on Sat Dec 23, 2006 2:34 pm

mattyjacobs wrote:so many things in this image make me cringe, but none of them have anything to do with the actual photo ... that is to say, I like the photo ... just not that coffee.

Reschsmooth understands me.[/i]


They do make good cups and tins!

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Postby Bob G on Wed Jan 10, 2007 5:55 pm

I dicked around with this a bit more and here is the result.

Shame it was taken before the current competition, but I,m not sure it doesn't breach a couple of PP rules anyway

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