Juliette in Black

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Juliette in Black

Postby Jeko70 on Mon Sep 10, 2007 5:29 pm

Juliette in Black

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Postby Alpha_7 on Mon Sep 10, 2007 5:36 pm

First has a bit of a cool matrix feel to it. I like the lighting and the angles Juliette's body is making.
Second shot the composition doesn't work as well here, you still have angles, but you've got bits of her fingers at the top, and its all a little to weird for me, but I respect your going for something different and edgey, but I think the composition really lets it down.
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Postby Reschsmooth on Mon Sep 10, 2007 5:58 pm

I love the lighting and (therefore) shadows in the first - the only thing that bothers me is the brownish join of the floor to background (I say this from the point of view of a crappy monitor where all of the background has no gradation - it is just black).

The second one - I think a longer shot, with more of her in the shot would have worked better for me. Give her some length to go with the thing she is leaning against.
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Postby Jeko70 on Mon Sep 10, 2007 5:58 pm

Thanks apreciate it.

Yep, the crop of the #2 it' not the best one.
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Postby Biggzie on Mon Sep 10, 2007 6:38 pm

I like #1, but #2 I think you need to decide what your doing with it.
If its going to be more of a head shot dont cut off the top of the head and dont crop as low, crop up closer to the small of her back on the left.
Which leads me to my next point, if you are intending to include more of the body, may I add that as a red blooded breathing male you have sliced off the best curves. If she is going to pose emphasising the curves of her butt, why 1/2 cut it off.
So either crop further to the left and get the curves or crop further to the right, through the small of her back just at the edge of her top and the bottom edge higher in the stomach area bollow the top. Either way give the top of her head back.
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Postby Bindii on Mon Sep 10, 2007 6:43 pm

I would love the chance to photograph her I thinks...

That first one is cool... I like nearly everything about it... the lighting is great as it invokes just the right mood for the shot...

I agree with the others re the crop on the second... is that the full framed shot or is it a crop?

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Postby Jeko70 on Mon Sep 10, 2007 8:14 pm

Thanks again,
this is the original, without crop

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Postby Biggzie on Tue Sep 11, 2007 12:08 am

I think this looks better than your cropped photo.
I would pull in the left side almost to the edge of her top as I said before. I think you got the right hand side right in your first crop. Dont loose any from the top edge, and bring the bottom edge up somewhere above the top of her pants.
I think a tight crop would look good too. bottom edge near shoulder, left edge near the shoulder blade leave the top edge and bring in the right either near the elbow or maybe the elbows shadow. a square crop might look good. I dont know how much resolution you will have left, but it might be worth trying to see how it looks next time you have a chance of a shoot like this.
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Postby Jeko70 on Tue Sep 11, 2007 1:39 pm

Thanks Biggzie,
I'll try to crop on your way!

Adding another shot for C & C

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Postby Biggzie on Tue Sep 11, 2007 2:56 pm

I like it, but I find the left arm a little distracting. My eyes went straight to her forearm. You should have left it totally it shot with the right edge further to the right. Youv'e got the top and left edge right. The bottom edge may have looked better slightly further down but Id have to see it before I said it was better.

Just a thought: This pose might look good as a landscape with the model on the right and more open space on the left for her to look into. but again, Id decide after seeing it.
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Postby PiroStitch on Tue Sep 11, 2007 3:25 pm

I like the last one you've posted except that it could be better cropped to make it look more like she's leaning on the right frame of the image.
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Postby !~DeViNe~DaRkNeSs~! on Tue Sep 11, 2007 8:31 pm

i like them all
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